My Question: is this proper English?
Please correct this letter according to your knowledges of English grammers because i want to prove this other Chinese, apparently an English teacher wrong. Thanks all for your time.
Dear sir
i’m writing to present my acknowledgement concerning the fact that we have in time recieved your fax offer.We are willing to accept all the terms except the price in fax offer considering the case that price you offer is beyond our reach.Consequently we sincerely extend our hope that you could reduce price to a certain degree within our abilityto afford.
I would have been most grateful if you could replay me at your earliest conviniece. And any favorable considerations will be highly appreciated.
no, thats crap english.
Dear Sir,
Upon receiving your fax, we have decided to accept the terms you have offered.
However, unfortunately, we are not able to pay the amount that you have suggested.
We hope that you could revise your offer, with regards to our budget.
I look forward to hearing from you,
Yours sincerely,
(whatever your name is).
i am english so i am right.
Dear sir,
I am writing in response to your recent offer, received by fax. We are willing to accept the terms therein, except the price. Unfortunately we consider the price that you offer to be outside our current capabilities. Consequently we would sincerely hope that you would reconsider a reduction in the offered price.
I would be most grateful if you could reply at your earliest convenience and would like to extend our appreciation and understanding of the offer tabled.
Yours Faithfully
line 2 “in time” should shift to the end of the sentence
spelling reply instead of replay.convenience-spelling.
IT IS LIKE THIS
Dear sir
i’m writing to present my acknowledgement ABOUT the fact that we have RECEIVED YOUR OFFER THROUGH FAX IN TIME.We are willing to accept all the terms except the price IN THE offer considering the case that THE PRICE OFFERED BY YOU IS beyond our reach. we FERVENTLY HOPE that you could reduce THE price to a certain degree within our ability to afford.
I WOULD BE GREATFUL IF YOU COULD REPLY ME ON THIS AT THE earliest . And any favorable considerations will be appreciated
I am writing to confirm acknowledgment with regard to your fax offer that was received in time. We are willing to accept most of the terms stated in the fax except the price. The price stated in the fax is considerably out of reach. Consequently we request that you could reduce the price to a certain degree within our affordability range.
I would be most grateful if you could reply to me at your earliest convenience. Any favourable considerations will be highly appreciated.